What will be your last lecture before you passed on out of this world?
Will you complain about your life?
Will you say positive and uplifting thing about your life?
Will you wonder what happen to it within your lifetime?
What kind of history will you leave other' to about you?
According to Mr. Randy Pausch's, his life were to becoming a Imaigeer and meeting Captain Kirk ( William Shanter) from the Star Trek Television Show.
With his lecture his were describing his health issues and how his father would refer to the Elephant Man as a way of having a bad experience within your lifetime.
And to life with the many changes that life will deal us and how to become success and do not let your life just passed you back, but take full control of it.
He is also describing about his childhood dreams of meeting Captain Kirk:
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From this lecture I got some very important information about not losing you focus or your dreams what ever they are, to go forward and learned from the lesson that your dreams are telling or describing to you.
Mr. Pauschs were also showing some of stuff animals that he won from Disney World games, just like him I have some small stuff animals that have being giving to me over the years from my family and other friends of mine.
He is also describing of being a Imaigeer and my understanding of this type of person, they are people that has a Master Degree in Engineering and also help creates Theme Parks for everyone to enjoy.
Two of my dreams are to get my Master Degree in Education and becoming a Head Start or First Grade Teacher within the next Two years and also completing in a 10K Walk-A-Throne for the cure of cancer within the next year.
Because of what my sister passed away from over Seven ago and for all of the ladies within my family and my best friend grandmother also, so that they can do more research and someday find a cure for cancer.
First I would like to say, I am happy to see that Mr. Pausch had an impact on you. It is interesting, how you and Mr. Pausch were connected in the stuffed animal goal. It added a depth to your connection in the writing.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I do want to touch on a few things in your writing. As I read through your post I noticed several misspelled words and articles missing in your sentences. The structure of your writing, I believe, needs work. You had run-on sentences, incomplete sentences, and sentences that felt clumsy. I had a very hard time following your thoughts because of these errors. My suggestion would be to proofread your work to yourself and then out loud. Have someone else read your work to help with structure and other minor errors. If you use these guidelines I believe your writing will improve in an exponential rate.
I understand what you wanted to say, because I was given the same task, but I was unable to get it from reading your post. I believe you could be an exceptional blogger and an outstanding teacher, but first you will need to work on your basics. So, as you accelerate forward, your progress will in turn filter down to your future students. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read and review your blog post. I cannot wait to see your growth in this class and future posts.
Sincerely,
Jason Lynch
EDM310 University of Alabama
MW4
You just skim the surface of the assignment. You provide some of the context for his lecture. But you did not follow the directions for writing about what he says about teaching. Here are the instructions you were to follow:
ReplyDelete"Think about the teaching methods he advocated and used at" Carnegie-Mellon. "Identify and comment on those techniques in a blog post of at least 4 substantive paragraphs. You MUST include a discussion which includes all of the things discussed by Dr. Pausch that you can use in your teaching. "